“Ophelia, we’re going to the movies and then to half apps, right?” asks Hamlet.
“Yeah, you still want to go?” concerned that he has something else in mind.
“Yeah of course I just got to go get the car from the garage. Just wait inside.”
“Okay,” Ophelia turns towards the door and takes a deep breath. She still hasn’t met his father or his mother. She takes a step into the house and smells cooking in the kitchen. Ophelia looks in and sees Gertrude cooking while on the phone giggling. Gertrude hasn’t even realized that she has walked in. She walks carefully hoping to not cause any attention. Watching Gertrude the whole time tiptoeing towards the living room she hits a wall.
“Well hello there?” the wall was Hamlet’s father. She looks up at the tall man.
“Hi, I’m umm… I’m-“
“-your Hamlet’s friend. Nice to meet you…”
“Ophelia.”
“Oh you’re Polonius’ daughter! It’s nice to meet you. Your father and my brother have gotten really close lately. They seem to always be together,” he looks at her wondering if she will give him some insight.
“Ophelia you ready? Oh hey dad we’re leaving,” Hamlet barges through the door with a smile and grabs Ophelia’s hand.
Hamlet starts driving and Ophelia is confused. They’re not going towards the movie theatre.
“Where are we going?” She asks curiously.
“You’ll see,” He smiles at her, grabs her hand and kisses her.
He pulls up in front of the beach and the moon is full. Reflected over the ocean is the moon and Ophelia looks down towards the sand. There’s a blanket and food. Hamlet is pulling out candles from the trunk and a lighter. He kisses her.
“I want this night to be special.”
8 comments:
AW! That was so cute! I liked Ophelia's emotion while being in the house. It made you want Gertrude to notice her and find out what she would say. When his father noticed her, I liked that his conversation was welcoming towards Ophelia showing that she could relax while being in the house. My favorite part was the mention of half apps :). But it was so romantic how he took her to the beach!
This is adorable. My attention was caught as soon as a read "Half Apps!" LOL. But, I like your connection with the two. It makes me questions Hamlets intentions just like Ophelias brother warned her as well. I also like the dad scene. The couples secrecy adds to what everyone wants to know, "What happens next?!" Love the modern twist jaz!
Like Rachael said, AWWWW! That was so cute! I could totally see Ophelia doing something like that. She seems sort of mousy to me but in a good way (because obviouslty she can still be dramatic). Making Hamlet a romantic is what really got me. I like to think he could be more than what we read in the text. I also love that you take them to the ocean, to the water. I feel like any story with Ophelia just has to have water mentioned at some point. It's like her calling card.
Nice, Jasmine! I could picture the entire thing in my head very easily (although for some reason I only think of my own living room). I liked how Hamlet and Ophelia seem pure and honest and young in their love. Not to mention unmistakably intimate. And your ending line plays into that in a cute way. I really liked that lol.
I really liked your interpretation of their life before the play. It really interested me that you put both Hamlet's mom and dad in the story. It was a great modern-day take and who knew Hamlet had some great dating ideas for Ophelia? Haha
Well-written Jasmine. I like the modernization of it. (I too was taken in at "half apps!") However, I wish you would have modernized Hamlet's social standing in society. You might not have him be a Prince in a modernization, but you might have him be the son of a mayor or a celebrity. This way your audience would understand that more is at play in the dynamics of their relationship than just themselves.
PS - I agree with Kelli about Ophelia and water! Nice choice!
I loved how you interpreted Ophelia. In your story she seems very likable and relatable to readers whereas in the play we dont learn too much about her personality. Old Hamlet was also an interesting character here. I hadnt pictured him as a very big and tall man but that characterization adds to his personality and role as king. I also like how you left this off on a cliffhanger.
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